Cows chew cud
Rondavels flourish
This a paradise;
The ocean stirs
And sardines run.
Posted for Midweek Motif at Poets United.
The Ocean Stirs
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Life in Verse, Prose & Visuals
Cows chew cud
Rondavels flourish
This a paradise;
The ocean stirs
And sardines run.
Posted for Midweek Motif at Poets United.
Comments are closed.
Wonderfully placed pause, as if coming alert again after dozing into satisfaction.
Thanks Susan!
What a surreal and delightful poem.. the dry landscape really sings out for water
Many thanks, Jae!
This was when humans lived in caves and spent most of their time trying to avoid being eaten themselves I assume!
Hi Robin! The piece tries to capture the Sardine Run phenomenon that takes place during winter months in South Africa. You can learn more here, http://www.sardinerun.com/sardinerun.asp
That’s the paradise we must aspire for. Well-penned.
Much appreciated!
I love the pictures presented in every line from slow rumination to the sardine spectacle…Catching a whiff of South Africa…Absolutely beautiful Khaya 🙂
The Sardine Run is really a spectacle. Thank you always for reading, Sumana!
Brief and yet riveting. An example of less is more!
I try always for brevity, and it’s not always easy to achieve. Thanks Bev!
Oh, that’s my kind of paradise!! I simply soaked myself into it….Lovely, Khaya!
I’m so pleased that you managed to soak for a while in this paradise. Thanks Panchali. 🙂
Love the alliteration in the first line, and the feast of imagery swimming through the whole poem.
Much appreciated, Maga!
I like the lull you created with your opening lines, and then the conclusion of frantic action. Well done,
Elizabeth
Ah, you noticed the frantic action.:-) Thanks Elizabeth!
Delightful.
Thank you, Rosemary!
I like your light-hearted take. Made me smile!
Oh, lovely! Thanks Mary. 🙂
I love your words in this one! “Cows chew cud”! Made me smile! My mom loves sardines!! Mother Earth does feed us! Big Hugs!
The generosity of Mother Earth, we should be grateful everyday. Thank you dear, Stacy! Big Hugs!
Nice one, my friend. 😀
Thank you. 🙂