trodden by passers-by
off the shore, you lie
one in a million
– dusty particulate
what’s there to discern?
intangible arguments of
time and infinity;
a revolutionary junta
where deceit is
bird’s claw
Note: I blame it on April; the tone of the speaker, I mean. I’m sure you’re aware of April month’s dispositions. Anyway, I’m linking this piece to Midweek Motif at Poets United. To read different takes on this prompt, please visit the link.
Ooops. No, I’m not aware of April’s disposition but I sure enjoyed reading this poem. And it’s true, perhaps it’s futile to discern about time and infifnity.
You done such a masterful job with line breaks. I’m looking at the words, at how they speak to each other… and I’m just enjoying myself. I love when punctuation and detail shapes a poem so neatly, and telling.
My favorite bit,
“off the shore, you lie
one in a million”
That “lie” can be so many things…
If it were only solely a bird’s claw–I was about to say that sounds rather restful, and then I remembered Prometheus. Provocative piece.
The sandy particles have had their day, done their job and are now at rest. some kissed by the sea and some blown by the wind and if they could speak they would have so much to tell.
“where deceit is bird’s claw” – what a powerful phrase and image. I enjoyed your poem very much. Nice to see you here.
Cleverly done! I love the enjambment and how some words have different layers of meaning.
Wow…. what a powerful write!! Inaudible yet felt… !! My weapon will be prayer…
Invisible*
where deceit is bird’s claw… my goodness this is so powerful, Khaya!
Nicely done! I enjoyed reading.
deceit is bird’s claw…so intriguing!
I don’t blame it on April, I blame it on the state of the world. Succinct and biting.
“intangible arguments of
time and infinity”
My favourite lines
Much love…
Thanks Myrna, I’m glad you enjoyed this piece! BTW, April’s disposition refers to T.S. Elliot’s quote, “April is the cruelest month…” and Dark Poetry Challenge run by Magaly in April.
My attempt at embracing ambiguity in this piece. I’m glad it succeeded. Thanks Maga!
Interesting observation, Susan. Well, the aim was not to provoke but that the piece leads to deeper introspection. Thanks for your input. Much appreciated!
So much to tell, indeed, Robin!
Many thanks, Sherry!
Much appreciated!
Great choice of weapon. Thanks Panchali!
I’m glad to hear that it’s effective. Thank you, Sanaa!
Thank you Annell for reading!
I’m glad you find it so, Rajani. Thank you!
“…state of the world” well said, Rosemary! Thank you for reading.
Lovely to see you here, Gillena. Much appreciated!
As you know Khaya, I am not a writer! Several times, when I read your work or even Magaly’s work, my mind and soul works/thinks/feels different. I hope that makes sense? Both of you are such clever writers in how you describe things! This is such a powerful piece!! Big Hugs!
(I will write soon! Sorry, so behind in things!)
Wow, that’s a huge compliment dear Stacy! Thank you so much. And yes, Magaly is such a talented writer. I’m honoured.??