trodden by passers-by
off the shore, you lie
one in a million
– dusty particulate
what’s there to discern?
intangible arguments of
time and infinity;
a revolutionary junta
where deceit is
bird’s claw
Note: I blame it on April; the tone of the speaker, I mean. I’m sure you’re aware of April month’s dispositions. Anyway, I’m linking this piece to Midweek Motif at Poets United. To read different takes on this prompt, please visit the link.
Ooops. No, I’m not aware of April’s disposition but I sure enjoyed reading this poem. And it’s true, perhaps it’s futile to discern about time and infifnity.
Thanks Myrna, I’m glad you enjoyed this piece! BTW, April’s disposition refers to T.S. Elliot’s quote, “April is the cruelest month…” and Dark Poetry Challenge run by Magaly in April.
You done such a masterful job with line breaks. I’m looking at the words, at how they speak to each other… and I’m just enjoying myself. I love when punctuation and detail shapes a poem so neatly, and telling.
My favorite bit,
“off the shore, you lie
one in a million”
That “lie” can be so many things…
My attempt at embracing ambiguity in this piece. I’m glad it succeeded. Thanks Maga!
If it were only solely a bird’s claw–I was about to say that sounds rather restful, and then I remembered Prometheus. Provocative piece.
Interesting observation, Susan. Well, the aim was not to provoke but that the piece leads to deeper introspection. Thanks for your input. Much appreciated!
The sandy particles have had their day, done their job and are now at rest. some kissed by the sea and some blown by the wind and if they could speak they would have so much to tell.
So much to tell, indeed, Robin!
“where deceit is bird’s claw” – what a powerful phrase and image. I enjoyed your poem very much. Nice to see you here.
Many thanks, Sherry!
Cleverly done! I love the enjambment and how some words have different layers of meaning.
Much appreciated!
Wow…. what a powerful write!! Inaudible yet felt… !! My weapon will be prayer…
Great choice of weapon. Thanks Panchali!
Invisible*
where deceit is bird’s claw… my goodness this is so powerful, Khaya!
I’m glad to hear that it’s effective. Thank you, Sanaa!
Nicely done! I enjoyed reading.
Thank you Annell for reading!
deceit is bird’s claw…so intriguing!
I’m glad you find it so, Rajani. Thank you!
I don’t blame it on April, I blame it on the state of the world. Succinct and biting.
“…state of the world” well said, Rosemary! Thank you for reading.
“intangible arguments of
time and infinity”
My favourite lines
Much love…
Lovely to see you here, Gillena. Much appreciated!
As you know Khaya, I am not a writer! Several times, when I read your work or even Magaly’s work, my mind and soul works/thinks/feels different. I hope that makes sense? Both of you are such clever writers in how you describe things! This is such a powerful piece!! Big Hugs!
(I will write soon! Sorry, so behind in things!)
Wow, that’s a huge compliment dear Stacy! Thank you so much. And yes, Magaly is such a talented writer. I’m honoured.??